6 August 2011
RD 1
We live in a society obsessed with image. So powerful is the influence of image that other terms of self-definition are difficult to identify. Men and women confront challenges that relate to body image and self-perception daily but why? Where does this pressure come from? Why are people at war with their bodies? These are some of the questions that mind boggle our minds everyday like in the mind of Mary Pipher. Does this imply why the time essence from a adolescence child to a woman be so traumatic? [THESIS] Psychiatric Trauma typically stresses the physical adjustment from a young girl to a woman instead of being looked at as an object in society.[THESIS]
Trauma is defined as an emotional experience that is painful, distressful, shocking, which often lasts in mental an physical effects. Mary Pipher says that changing social expectations can be overwhelming especially for girls and in additional to dealing with these physical and emotional changes, many adolescents must try to adapt to shifting social roles. In today's society we know when a woman is drafted into the NFL it is a head turner, when a woman becomes a member of our legislature, it is a head turner, and we also know that when a woman gets a job in a field that is only specialized by a man's skills is known to be an occupational segregation.
A female gender going through adolescence may find it harder to find a serious career job. Picture a young, teen dressed in black stilettos using a high fashioned business suit only known to be made by a famous designer's award winning collection walking through the doors of wall street trying to get a job as a stock broker. Even though she may be a girl who graduated her 3 years earlier than her class, her interviewing employer would have never guessed. In their minds they are probably thinking this young teenager is trying to score a part time summer job. This person wouldn't be second guessed to what her intentions of a career job is if she was a middle aged woman entering the office in a thrifty bought business suit. She will no longer be looked at as an object in society.
Although studies have shown that adolescents' responses to trauma, compared with those of younger children and adults, have not been well studied, a few studies have shown that differential effects on adolescents consistent with the existence of particular vulnerabilities during this age. As Michael Sabetta stated, "The severe emotional stress that a woman might feel, in adjusting to her gender role, could result in a disordered psychic or behavioral state. However, I would venture to say that this type of an extreme reaction would probably not be the norm, or even fairly prevalent."
Trauma exists in both gender roles through out our daily lives, particularly in women. "Simone de Beauvoir believed adolescence is when girls realize that men have the power and that their only power comes from consenting to become submissive adored objects." (350) Who is to say that this young teenage girl cannot manage your finances with Wall Street?
Works Cited
Pipher, Mary. “Saplings in the Storm.” Dialogues: An Argument Rhetoric and Reader. 7th edition. Eds. Gary Goshgarian and Kathleen Krueger. New York: Pearson-Longman, 2011. 347-354
Alison Matsumoto
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Hi:
Your RD has good thesis support with the use of the required, classmate quotes, readings, and an argument from a classmate's posting.
However, there are some grammatical errors,the word count is insufficient and perhaps the picture can be placed elsewhere as the words that are showing within the picture are not clear. Also, I feel the title is not supported with the rest of the RD.
Overall I think you did pretty well. =)
Aloha Mary,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your RD#1 it was very interesting and gave me another point of view to think about. Unfortunately I copied and pasted your work and found you only had 597 words including your work cited. The required amount of words needed was 750-1000 words for this assignment. Overall I liked your references and how you used them to make your point. Also the picture gave a nice touch.
Mahalo,
Maile Hong
Hello,
ReplyDeleteI've enjoyed reading your paper as you hold a strong standpoint for women participating in a man's kind of environment. Thesis brings your supporting points to a visual level for all mankind to see. Strong brief conclusion that sums your essay all together.
Word count did fall to only 523 when minimum requirement is 750 minimum. Also, it could be me but I was confused on where you stand on your classmates quote. Were you opposing to it or simply agreeing with it?
Might want to make that clearer.
Few grammatical errors, so reread carefully. Any personal experience? or maybe one from a friend or family member. One of the requirements for our paper.
Overall, everything else looks great. Again, strong image on society's failure upon women and how they are looked at as.
Keep up the good work :)
Your classmate,
Jasmin Obadencio